Online educationNowadays,with the rapid development of economics,new things come out continually.An encreassing number of people turn to onlinn education to improve their performance.The reasons for this phenomena can be stated as follows:Initially,i

Online educationNowadays,with the rapid development of economics,new things come out continually.An encreassing number of people turn to onlinn education to improve their performance.The reasons for this phenomena can be stated as follows:Initially,i
Online education
Nowadays,with the rapid development of economics,new things come out continually.An encreassing number of people turn to onlinn education to improve their performance.
The reasons for this phenomena can be stated as follows:Initially,it is common to use the internet for work and leisure in our daily life.It could connect people all over the world.so that,it make us covenient to broadcast information and communicate with others;Further more,people had make great progress in techonology in the recent decades.Not only could we convey the voice and words,but also we could convey the video;Last but not least,Now people in growing numbers are beginning to believe that learning is a most important aspect of life,and they try to learning by many kinds of ways.
I belive that the online education make people continual their education at home after school or finish the work.It is a revolution for the traditional education.It will be popular in our daily life.

Online educationNowadays,with the rapid development of economics,new things come out continually.An encreassing number of people turn to onlinn education to improve their performance.The reasons for this phenomena can be stated as follows:Initially,i
rapid development of economics 改为rapid development of economy,
economics是经济学（学科）.而不是经济条件
new things come out continually,你的意思是新事物不断出现?建议改为 innovations keep coming out.
An encreassing number of people turn to onlinn education to improve their performance. 是 increasing! 还有performance有点别扭,改成personal abilities(个人能力）
The reasons for this phenomena can be stated as follows,把FOLLOWS的S去掉： as follow
Initially用firstly更好
so that,it make us covenient to broadcast information and communicate with others; 去掉that 只有个so就可以了
你这些句子都是中式英语,看得很别扭.错误不多但问题就是太中文化了.