求英语短文结尾、（关于艾薇儿）Avril Lavigne,a wizard rock who was born in Canada.She's my idol ,my hero as well.Her music is great .When i feel depressed,i always listen to her music,for example,"freak out" ,"together" and "i can do be

求英语短文结尾、（关于艾薇儿）Avril Lavigne,a wizard rock who was born in Canada.She's my idol ,my hero as well.Her music is great .When i feel depressed,i always listen to her music,for example,"freak out" ,"together" and "i can do be
求英语短文结尾、（关于艾薇儿）
Avril Lavigne,a wizard rock who was born in Canada.She's my idol ,my hero as well.Her music is great .When i feel depressed,i always listen to her music,for example,"freak out" ,"together" and "i can do better" .The lyrics of the songs ris me up,and i've gained great encourage.
we have a similar character,she said "i
don't care what other people said ,i
just want to do myself ".i think so .
结尾给点提示吧?急、可加分.

求英语短文结尾、（关于艾薇儿）Avril Lavigne,a wizard rock who was born in Canada.She's my idol ,my hero as well.Her music is great .When i feel depressed,i always listen to her music,for example,"freak out" ,"together" and "i can do be
很多地方有点 Changlish,第一句就有毛病,Avril Lavigne,a wizard rock who was born in Canada.She's my idol ,my hero as well,应该是在Canada后用逗号,直接Avril Lavigne,a wizard rock who was born in Canada,is my idol ,my hero as well.
至于,music用great,呃,不是不好,建议你再换一个比较小的词用,gain后最好再来个 from it.
最后一段,I am similar with her,我们有相同的角色这句话有点儿不合适,I think so 这句话用的有点儿假,可以写,
why not?we are the most unique people in the world.
其实结尾不必再写,建议你把中间内容再充实一点,因为这篇文章你既然写了这个结尾就已经完了,再写只会显得比较多余,所以充实一下中间,但看这篇文章介绍偶像太单调了,你可以再写一写你喜欢他的什么?

第一句话我建议改成：Avril Lavigne who was born in Canada is a wizard rock .第二句：我觉得先写她的音乐很棒在说她是我的偶像，这样会有点因果关系比较好！Her music is pretty great and she's my idol ,my hero as well.第三句：我觉得语言简洁点好，建议改成：When i feel depre...

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第一句话我建议改成：Avril Lavigne who was born in Canada is a wizard rock .第二句：我觉得先写她的音乐很棒在说她是我的偶像，这样会有点因果关系比较好！Her music is pretty great and she's my idol ,my hero as well.第三句：我觉得语言简洁点好，建议改成：When i feel depressed, i always listen to her music,like "freak out" ,"together" and "i can do better" .
我建议就不要写we have a similar character, 我觉得很中式英语，直接说：I think we’re really similar. 会好一点，然后接著下文。
结尾就不要用：i think so。我觉得有点单调。
干脆另起一段：Yep, she just so cool.I totally love her!
哈哈，你也喜欢avril吖？我也是噢。超级喜欢她。
不过你这样的介绍还是简单了一点，没有说她的经历，她的爱好，她的好朋友Evan，这些你都没说呢。回去修改一下吧！有空找我吖，大家都是爱V之人！

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her experiences in the pop world have also helped Lavigne let down her guard and allow people to see behind the angry stare "You can be cool and you can be happy ,"she said . "I've got so much to celebrate.I don't need to be tough about it."

To sum up,
In short,
In a word,
On the whole,
From the above comparison and contrast, we can safely conclude that…

When the advantage and disadvantages are carefully compared...

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To sum up,
In short,
In a word,
On the whole,
From the above comparison and contrast, we can safely conclude that…

When the advantage and disadvantages are carefully compared, the most striking conclusion is self-evident…
Judging from all evidence offered, we may reasonably come to the conclusion that…

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