请帮我看下下面一封信中的错误,并纠正这是我用英语给外国人写的一封信,这封信对我来说意义重大,Dear **,I`m a 14-year-old boy in Chongqing China,As you know,I`m only 14 so that my English is not very good.please fo

请帮我看下下面一封信中的错误,并纠正这是我用英语给外国人写的一封信,这封信对我来说意义重大,Dear **,I`m a 14-year-old boy in Chongqing China,As you know,I`m only 14 so that my English is not very good.please fo
请帮我看下下面一封信中的错误,并纠正
这是我用英语给外国人写的一封信,这封信对我来说意义重大,
Dear **,
I`m a 14-year-old boy in Chongqing China,As you know,I`m only 14 so that my English is not very good.please forgive my unfluent sentences.(To your surprise,I am in grade 10!)
I have seen your movie such as ,, and so on.I fall in love with them beacause they are very exciting and suit me very much.When I saw your movie,all the things that are unhappy were all forgotten.And also,you look very cool in the movies.
Tell you a interesting thing.In the movie,almost every sences you are in,you wear a hat.I think the hat you wear are all wonderful.so I have my hair cut and buy a plenty of caps in stores.When I wear them in school .my classmates praise it .Then,I am very pround to say:"my inspration is from the man who named ***."
When I am sad ,I look at the photos of you.I will be happy.When I am in trouble,I look at the photos of you.Then I will be stronger and get over them.beacuse your actions move me everytime.I remember that you said your movite power is from your dreams.But I want to say ,my movite power is from you.I konw ,there`re many fans of you in the world.I am just one of them and my power is small.But my passion to you is not small as my body.I will always follow to you and support you all the time!
Chongqing is a big city with mant fantansy things,the tastey hot-pot here is famous in the world ,Welcome to you!
PS:(There`s a foreign teacher teaching me in my school.He looks like you very much!So when i Saw him ,he always remind me of you.)
May joy be with you always.
Best Wishes,
**

请帮我看下下面一封信中的错误,并纠正这是我用英语给外国人写的一封信,这封信对我来说意义重大,Dear **,I`m a 14-year-old boy in Chongqing China,As you know,I`m only 14 so that my English is not very good.please fo
1 Chongqin,China
2 I'm only 14 so my English is...
3 Please forgive...
4 I am in Grade 10
5 I have seen your movie named ...
6 because
7 they are very exciting and they are just to my tastes
8 When I watch your movie,all the things unhappen will be forgotten.And you look so cool in the movies as well.Let me tell you an interesting thing.
9 you wear a hat almost every scence you show up.
10 I wear them in my school
11 When I am unhappy,I have a look at your photos,then,I turn to be happier.
12 All of these are all because you!It is you whom make me move further!
13 movite power错了,应该是 motivity 表示动力
14 in the world 改成 all over the world 吧,应该感觉会好一点,你用的也没有错误.
15 my power is small 改成 perhaps I am nothing
16 But my passion to you is not small as my body.还是别要了吧,外国人不一定听得懂,而且表述上也有问题
17 But I wll follow and support you all the time!
18 with many fantansy things,and the ...
19 Welcome to you 改成We are here to welcome you!
20 foreign teacher 改成English teacher 吧,foreign teacher 意味着英语老师,但对于外国人来说,foreign teacher 对他会有歧义.
21 So when I see him ,he always reminds me of you!
我的意见,仅供参考,

1.movie改为复数,你后面列举了3个呢
2.后面一个句子"我喜欢上他们因为..."改为一般过去时~是叙述过去
3.all the...那个定语从句are也要改were~事态一致
4.告诉你一个有趣的事要用an~元音开头
5.you "were" in , you "wore"....
6.the "hats" 复数的嘛~
7.the phot...

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1.movie改为复数,你后面列举了3个呢
2.后面一个句子"我喜欢上他们因为..."改为一般过去时~是叙述过去
3.all the...那个定语从句are也要改were~事态一致
4.告诉你一个有趣的事要用an~元音开头
5.you "were" in , you "wore"....
6.the "hats" 复数的嘛~
7.the photos of "your" 干脆改为your photos
其他在表达上差不多,还有几个时态和复数的问题自己再检查下~我就不列举了

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Dear **,
I'm a 14-year-old boy in Chongqing China. As you know,I'm only 14 .so my English is not very good. Please forgive my unfluent sentences.(To your surprise, I am in grade 10!!)
I hav...

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Dear **,
I'm a 14-year-old boy in Chongqing China. As you know,I'm only 14 .so my English is not very good. Please forgive my unfluent sentences.(To your surprise, I am in grade 10!!)
I have seen your movie such as <***>,<***>,<***> and so on. I fall in love with them beacause they are very exciting and suit me very well.When I saw your movie, all the unhappy things were forgotten. And also, you look very cool in the movies.
Tell you an interesting thing. In the movie<***>, almost every sences you acted, you wore a hat.I think the hat you wore were all wonderful. So I have my hair cut and buy a plenty of caps in stores. When I wear them in school , my classmates praise them . Then, I am very pround to say:"My inspration is from the man who named ***."
When I am sad , I look at the photos of you. I will be happy.When I get in trouble, I look at the photos of you. Then I will be stronger and get over them.Beacuse your actions move me everytime. I remember that you said your movite power is from your dreams.But I want to say , my movite power is from you.I konw , there're many fans of you in the world.I am just one of them and my power is so small. But my passion to you is not small as my body. I will always follow you and support you all the time!
is a big city with many fantansy things,the tastey hot-pot here is famous in the world . You must try it !We will welcome you visit Chongqing.
PS:(There's a foreign teacher teaching me in my school. He looks like you very much! So when I Saw him , he always reminds me of you!)
May joy be with you always.
Best Wishes,
**

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